Ooohh, this is lovely! Had me snuffling & wiping my eyes through half of it--but mostly in a good way, really. I guess what's so heartwrenching is the thought of John being open, emotional, not scarred & full of rage, & the thought of Rodney reacting to that by learning to step beyond his defenses & sarcasm & fear of rejection. Sort of like a brief glimpse of what-might-have-been; but then you open up but-yet-might-be....
Altho' there's a very occasional typo, your writing is clean & wonderfully straightforward, action & dialog flowing together & sweeping the story forward without hitches or distractions. In that sense it is like a dream, the way it moves along relentlessly but much more orderly & sensible than any dream I've had. (It speaks well of your ability to make readers suspend disbelief that I just wrote that "Sheppard's-3-years-old-&-McKay's-his-babysitter" is orderly & sensible. ;-) Thanks so much for writing & sharing!
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Altho' there's a very occasional typo, your writing is clean & wonderfully straightforward, action & dialog flowing together & sweeping the story forward without hitches or distractions. In that sense it is like a dream, the way it moves along relentlessly but much more orderly & sensible than any dream I've had. (It speaks well of your ability to make readers suspend disbelief that I just wrote that "Sheppard's-3-years-old-&-McKay's-his-babysitter" is orderly & sensible. ;-) Thanks so much for writing & sharing!